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Hi Lucy, thanks for sharing.

Possible typo, this line seems to be missing a preposition: "Velara and the boys had turned not into the guest wing [?] the High Wardens and their families"

Interesting start! It seems the two dragons are in humanoid form... shapeshifting? Magic? Or maybe I only think that because they're in uniforms and in the same interior space as humans. Consider clarifying if they have taken human form or simply have a grandiose hall.

The human kids (children or siblings of V?) are amusing, but their impertinence towards the host seems dangerous! A lord of a castle can't brook blatant disrespect, and it seems likely he'd introduce some physical punishment soon. If he continues simply putting up with it he risks looking a fool to his rivals, and maybe the reader.

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